What do you think about the bios I created for my characters?

****THIS IS ONLY A GENERAL THING%26lt; I DID NOT ADD BACK STORIES TO THE BIO BUT THEY HAVE BACK STORIES***



Cassandra

Nickname: Cassy, Cass

Age: 15

Gender: Female

Height: 5”1

Weight: 110 pounds

Eye: Static blue

Hair: Medium, choppy brown

Skin: Caucasian (normal white not tan or pale)

Powers:

? Reading minds

? Sharing thoughts through mind

? Changing a persons mind (through mind type of stuff)

? Moving things with her mind

Personality: Rebellious, not very careful about looks until Elliot, likes to bad mouth people, not very flirty, gets embarrassed by boys (flirting wise) easily.

Clothes: Jeans, Graphic Tee’s, and comfy easy types of stuff

Favorite color: Silver

Favorite food: Milk



Elliot

Nickname: Elliot… just Elliot (people make funny of him and call him Eli)

Age: 15

Gender: Male

Height: 5”9

Weight: 160 (muscle)

Eye: Green

Hair: His hair is a mix of brown and blonde but mostly brown and shaggy

Skin: Caucasian (tan-ish)

Powers:

? Exploding things with a look or a touch (he can control how big or small the explosion is and when it will happen (like if he looks at it and thinks five minutes it will go off in five minutes))

? Controlling the emotions of women (only girls though and he likes to make them blush a lot)

? He can block other peoples psychic abilities

Personality: He is a total flirt, and loves girls but his heart belongs to Cassy but she does not know that. He is generally happy but can have a bad temper.

Clothes: Jeans(not tight emo jeans, he hates that) the loose type, and t-shirts.

Favorite Color: Red

Favorite food: Potato chips





Page

Nickname: Page…

Age: 8

Gender: Female

Height: 4” 2

Weight: 50 pounds

Eye: Misty Grey Blue

Hair: Light Blonde, short bob

Skin: Caucasian normal

Powers:

? Breaking down sound and solids by just looking or thinking about it hard enough (it is like a mental com)

? Shape mimicry

? Reforming matter

Personality: Slightly diabolical with her twin, but nice and likes to joke around but she is a kid that curses a lot.

Clothes: Skirts, and pink, and matchy stuff.

Favorite Color: Pink

Favorite Food: Chocolate



Nathan

Nickname: Nathe

Age: 8

Gender: Male

Height: 4” 3

Weight: 57

Eye: Misty Gray Blue

Hair: Light blonde

Skin: Caucasian normal

Powers:

? Sleep inducing

? Elemental control

Personality: Diabolical, seemingly innocent but not really.

Clothes: Jeans, and blue shirts

Favorite Color: Blue

Favorite Food: Coca-Cola



Ok, so this is basically a story about these kids who are all psychics and are being hunted by government people. Now let me explain. Well so Cass, Page, Nathan were all happy happy family when there parents were killed by goverment people. THey leave there home and use their powers to survive. Now then they end up finding Elliot and they end up deciding they are going to live a normal life. They begin to go to school and elliot and Cass fall in love and he continues to make girls blush and stuff. But then what happens is the goverment people step in in the middle of the school day and they end up being exposed and making a run for it. They are now once again on the run and attempting to survive because the goverment people found a way to completely make them selves immune to psychics. Well I shall not ruin the ending.



But the characters, I know they have a lot more to them but I did not want to completely bore you to death/ SO what are your opinions on them, what should change, anything to add?What do you think about the bios I created for my characters?
There's several things wrong with it ... one: Coca cola and milk are not food; they're drinks. Moving things with their minds is called Telekinesis and they have too many powers each ';/ I - personally - don't like characters who have more than one ability as it sometimes means they cannot have a downfall ';/ You should also include one of those. What can be done to hurt or 'destroy' the character; even the most powerful character's have to have a downfall somewhere. The government need a downfall too. The human race may be becoming smarter and finding ways to do stuff we couldn't years ago there's no way that they'd be able to stop everything from affecting them ... so as I said, give them a downfall.What do you think about the bios I created for my characters?
Very nice i would love to read your story. Why don't you publish it?